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I Wrote An Essay For A School Exam And In 25 Mins Accidentally Created A (Hopefully) Masterpiece

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For an english exam I recently had, I had to write a descriptive essay on a haunted forest and I came up with this. It took about 15-20 mins to write, and later I added modifications to it and decided to add this to my ‘book’ (on whattpad: Blades of fire and hearts of ice, will add it in the next 10-12 chapters). I’m open for any critisism and compliments, so pls tell me what u think :)

I tried to make it as non-creepy as possible, because my teacher told me ‘You are only 12, try to keep your writting a little less dark’ soooo happy reading

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Tanii

She/Her, I love books (pjo and hp r my favs) I am writting my own book on whattpad (Blades of fire, Hearts of ice). I love K-pop (I am a blink, ARMY but I listen to a lot of other grps but don't follow them) I also LOVE animals. Byee~

She/Her, I love books (pjo and hp r my favs) I am writting my own book on whattpad (Blades of fire, Hearts of ice). I love K-pop (I am a blink, ARMY but I listen to a lot of other grps but don't follow them) I also LOVE animals. Byee~

Diana Lopetaitė

Hey there, Pandas! My name is Diana (though some prefer to refer to me as Diane, Deanna, and even Liana sometimes), and I am a Community Post Moderator Lead for Bored Panda. As my position title states, I am one of the people (employed Pandas for bamboo) over here who work with the community side of things on this website to ensure all is well, and while at that, I also help various creators and artists get recognition for the incredible work they do by connecting them to a large worldwide audience. Other than that, outside of work, you can find me brewing a nice cup of coffee, making a pizza from scratch, or baking brownies. I also love traveling, concerts, and cats (heavy on that, because I am a cat mom).

Hey there, Pandas! My name is Diana (though some prefer to refer to me as Diane, Deanna, and even Liana sometimes), and I am a Community Post Moderator Lead for Bored Panda. As my position title states, I am one of the people (employed Pandas for bamboo) over here who work with the community side of things on this website to ensure all is well, and while at that, I also help various creators and artists get recognition for the incredible work they do by connecting them to a large worldwide audience. Other than that, outside of work, you can find me brewing a nice cup of coffee, making a pizza from scratch, or baking brownies. I also love traveling, concerts, and cats (heavy on that, because I am a cat mom).

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Human Name 1 year ago

The punctuation is the least of the worries here. The vocabulary is painfully small, repetitive and infantile. It reads like a middle schooler read a Francesca Lia Block novel, cribbed from it and then hit up a thesaurus to try and make it a little different. And why the specific note of a the phoenix being fiery when phoenixes are fiery by nature? Redundant.

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Tanii (Post author) 1 year ago

also, never read any Francesca Lia block novel, and i am in middle school, so maybe thats why it sounds like a middle schooler wrote one... as for the point on why i pointed out the fact of the phoenix being fiery was a). needed some alliteration (yea, used a word for the appeal. so?) b) i wanted to.

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Marcos Valencia 1 year ago (edited)

Well, I wouldn't say "masterpiece", but you can start from here.

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Tanii (Post author) 1 year ago

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Phoenix(or nix)they/them 1 year ago

Ik this was a month ago, but this is as you said, a masterpiece for what you have and the details, and the essay level you are at is good for your age. Tbh I'm just a sophomore in highschool and in a pinch ik I do my best work, but I probably need to not procrastinate so often with essays and then just barely meet the deadline. AND THAT'S MY NAME 🤣

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Human Name 1 year ago

The punctuation is the least of the worries here. The vocabulary is painfully small, repetitive and infantile. It reads like a middle schooler read a Francesca Lia Block novel, cribbed from it and then hit up a thesaurus to try and make it a little different. And why the specific note of a the phoenix being fiery when phoenixes are fiery by nature? Redundant.

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Tanii (Post author) 1 year ago

also, never read any Francesca Lia block novel, and i am in middle school, so maybe thats why it sounds like a middle schooler wrote one... as for the point on why i pointed out the fact of the phoenix being fiery was a). needed some alliteration (yea, used a word for the appeal. so?) b) i wanted to.

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Marcos Valencia 1 year ago (edited)

Well, I wouldn't say "masterpiece", but you can start from here.

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Tanii (Post author) 1 year ago

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Phoenix(or nix)they/them 1 year ago

Ik this was a month ago, but this is as you said, a masterpiece for what you have and the details, and the essay level you are at is good for your age. Tbh I'm just a sophomore in highschool and in a pinch ik I do my best work, but I probably need to not procrastinate so often with essays and then just barely meet the deadline. AND THAT'S MY NAME 🤣

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