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The sky was grey, the color I needed to make my heart, hard as stone and without fear. I thought I knew what what coming when it started, when they took her, with her beautiful hair and gleaming eyes. My own eyes fill with tears that I try to push back as I remember her horror struck face. It shouldn't have been her, she should be sitting next to me, we should be on my lawn gazing at the stars. We should be gossiping about our classmates, resting our heads on eachother. We should be together, we should be happy, and safe.But here I am, hiding in a log, damp, and chilled to the bone, not just from cold, but terror too. And who knows where she is, likely somewhere worse than I. I scan the land and the large figures of guards continue to march, patrolling the area. They might be looking for me, but that's unlikely, I'm just a speck of dust next to their vast empire.

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I used the Ernest Hemingway route -
It was a sad day, an angel joined the heavens

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Ok so this guy, he walked up so this fish and the fish was like “Wasup, welcome to Mr. Fish’s Wisdom! I’m here to give you WISDOM!!” Then a narrator said “Ketchup, we all know it’s tomatoes but how is it made?” Then a tomato popped up out of no where and a hand grabbed it “Well, you see, they take a tomato and squeeze it like this” the hand squeezed the tomato and juice came out and landed in a small bowl. “Now here’s the important part. UPS takes a plane and ships the tomato juice to the magical fairy who turns it into ketchup!”

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The fog swirled through the twisted and deformed trees, giving the forest an eerie, supernatural look. I steeled myself for what was to come and stepped into the woods. The trees seemed to stretch towards me and I started breathing quickly, trying to calm myself as claustrophobia was one of my greatest problems. An animal of some sort cried out nearby, a cold and raw sound that increased my heart rate.

I wiped my brow and continued forward. I needed to find what I was looking for- no matter what I had to go through to get it. It was my only hope, the only way to saved the ones I loved.

A dark figure stepped out from the shadows and placed a hand on my shoulder. I gasped but then leaned into him.

"Kiru!" I breathed in relief.

"You came," he replied. "I wasn't sure you would."

"I- I almost didn't, but you know how much I need-"

His face hardened and his voice assumed a cold edge. "Very well, if that's all."

"Kiru-"

He turned away, taking his hand off of my shoulder, and began leading me through the tangle of trees. I followed mournfully. He didn't understand how much I needed what I was after. My heart could bear both him and it in mind, though, and I was sure I longed for both equally.

"Kiru, I-" I try.

"Quiet, now. There are things in these woods that would not hesitate to attack you." Then, after a pause, he added, "Though I would surely do my best to keep you from them."

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I was running through a field of pure gold. Right behind me, was him. He looked over at me and grinned. I grinned back. We were together. We would stay in the sunshine forever. But suddenly a dark form came and grabbed him, snatched him away from me. He was gone, he's now gone forever. I start screaming, and I wake up. I had that horrible nightmare again. He's not gone. He's right here with me. I look over on the other side of the bed. It's empty. I get up and go to the kitchen. My mom is there. When did she get here? That's when I remember. Today is the funeral. He died. He's really gone forever. I start crying, and my mom comes over to me, hugging me. My sobs shake my body. He's never coming back. He suddenly walks into the room. He's alive! I stop crying and run to him, smiling. I tell him not to scare me like that again. Behind my back, my mom just shakes her head and says to herself, "I feared this would happen. She's hallucinating. The poor girl, to suddenly lose her husband in war, and think he's still alive. Well, I should consult the doctor.." My mom walks away, leaving me with my husband, staring kindly at me. I grin at him. I knew he wouldn't leave me. He never will.

Wow.....I didn't mean for that story to turn out that sad....

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"Marky. Marky wake up. Wake up!" I shook his head vigorously, "It's sunrise; c'mon, we gotta go back to the Shed, or before they come out."

Sure enough, the moon was setting. It was December 31rst, 3117. Nearly forty-seven years since it began. Nearly forty-seven years of torture. Perhaps next year... I mused, knowing full well it wouldn't happen.

Marky groaned, stirring, "W-what time is it?"

I rubbed the dirt off of my fading watch and squinted, "6:23 AM."

"S**t!" he bolted up, "We gotta hurry!"

"No kidding, sherlock" I replied. I've learned long ago that cracking jokes was a much better way to cope than breaking down in tears.

"But..." he hesitated, "What about the supplies? We haven't managed to get any, and Ocean will be displeased."

I'd forgotten about that. No supplies meant no food. No food meant hunger. Hunger meant weak wills. And weak will meant... I shuddered. Better not think about that.

I mustered a brave smile, "No worries; we can handle one night without supplies."

It was true- it's happened before. But this was going to be the third day in a row where the teams came back empty-handed.

Marky was quiet for a moment, "Remember our talk last night? It wouldn't be so bad if we-"

"No." I interrupted forcefully, "I refuse to give in to... to them."

"But..." he trailed off.

"No. End of discussion."

oO0Oo

As we neared the Shed, the sun started rising. I cursed myself internally. We should've woken up earlier. Hopefully, they wouldn't come out this early today. Hopefully.

A piercing howl echoed off of the deserted buildings. An answering howl came- much closer. Marky froze.

"Did you hear that?"

I nodded, then motioned for him to be silent. Peeking out of the corner, I saw a horde of them. They seemed to be pretty sluggish since it was still so early.

I rotated my fist at Marky. That was the signal for a sighting. He paled.

Dropping my fist, I began the traditional countdown. Three fingers... two fingers... one finger...

We shot off towards the shed. Barely getting past them before they noticed. The entire horde turned around and started to chase us. They "ran" at a jogging speed now, but as the sun rose, they got faster. We sprinted with all our might, hoping to reach the Shed before they speed up too much. Then we'll be safe.

oO0Oo

We've been running for what seemed like hours but must've been only minutes when they started gaining. Knowing that we weren't anywhere near the Shed, I curved off towards an abandoned building. Hopefully, we'll buy some time there and hold them off until a plan is formed.

We reached the stairwell just in time. As the door slammed, the first... things smashed into it. They were close enough to taunt now. Their faces twisted into cruel smirks, and they crooned to us:

"Why not join us... there will be no more starvation... no more pain... no more fighting. Give in, and have eternal peace."

A familiar face turned to Marky, "Your mother wouldn't be drunk, your father wouldn't have died. Your sister's already with us... and she's so happy now... We wouldn't hurt you, I promise. After all, you can trust your old babysitter... right?"

Marky froze, sweating.

"No Marky," I said, "They're lying!"

Another face turned to me, "And you, my dear... you would be happy too, you know. You could join your precious-"

I grabbed Marky's hand and ran up the stairs, ignoring the sweet nothings emanating from the door.

"What do we do?" asked Marky.

I bit my lip, "I don't know"

AN: 10 minutes is up- it's not really finished, if you want more you can comment I guess.